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13 December 2008 @ 10:04 am
HAPPY H/D HOLIDAYS, SCARLET_MALFOY!  
Author: frayach
Recipient: scarlet_malfoy
Title:For Whatever Ails You
Rating: NC-17 (Very, very!NC-17)
Word Count:: 17,900
Warnings: From recipient’s wish-list - if any of these aren’t to your tastes, please steer clear: plot, flangst,intermittent humour, first time sex, first time rimming, light BDSM, UST, frottage, outdoor sex, obstacles in the way of their being with each other, friends and family in disapproval of them, intensity of emotion after life and death situations, intensity of emotion in general, snarkyness, flashback scenes, realistic sex, IC characters; both thinking it's one-sided when really it's not, them coming to a place together where they can open up completely and let down all their walls, fighting leading into sex, surprise!buttsex
Summary: It’s Christmas Eve and everyone has to write a poem telling the deepest truths of their hearts. With Amortentia no longer coursing through their veins, what will Harry and Draco have to say to each other?
Author’s Notes: Scarlet, I had a lot of fun writing this. You gave me great prompts to work with! I think I hit most of them. The only place I let you down a tad is the timing (it’s technically not post-war, although it is post-DH). I hope you enjoy it nonetheless. :)


( For Whatever Ails You )
 
 
 
the indescribable moments of your life: mongoliatonights on December 13th, 2008 04:53 pm (UTC)
HOT. GUH.
Frayach ni Cuill: Checking It Outfrayach on June 21st, 2009 08:37 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much for commenting. I’m glad you liked it :)
Sesheta: Terminus buttsex ftwsesheta_66 on December 13th, 2008 05:07 pm (UTC)
OMG! I am on my way out, so I can't read right now, but you had me with "surprise!buttsex". *snickers*

Frayach ni Cuill: Checking It Outfrayach on June 21st, 2009 08:38 pm (UTC)
The icon is priceless! Thanks, love.
(no subject) - sesheta_66 on June 22nd, 2009 02:37 am (UTC) (Expand)
scrtkprscrtkpr on December 13th, 2008 05:17 pm (UTC)
Okay, I loved this fic a LOT. The structure, with the slow reveal of backstory, interspersed with the reading of the poems (some of them truly hilarious!). The Amortentia, and the ring, the passion running through this story... I was truly enthralled, to the point that I couldn't even bring myself to question, as I normally would, whether those teenage boys would have written and revealed, in poem form, some of the things they did. I just couldn't bring myself to care and was perfectly willing to float along on the beautiful writing and the turbulent, equally beautiful emotions.

ETA: Looking at my comment, I am realizing it looks far too short for the depth of emotion I just experienced while reading this. You made my chest clench up repeatedly, and in fact, I still feel a bit like my heart has been shaken like a snow globe. (Also, the sex scenes were incredible!)

Edited at 2008-12-13 05:31 pm (UTC)
Frayach ni Cuill: Checking It Outfrayach on June 21st, 2009 08:40 pm (UTC)
Wow! I'm so glad you enjoyed this. I was going for a combination of smut, humor and puppy love, so I'm glad you saw the poignancy in it. Thank so much, my dear.
primadonna611primadonna611 on December 13th, 2008 05:24 pm (UTC)
remarkable story- the chemistry between the boys fairly lept off the page and Im positive I have never read first time sex as hot as this!
Wonderfully descriptive writing and a great plot to boot- scarlet malfoy is very lucky indeed...
Frayach ni Cuill: Checking It Outfrayach on June 21st, 2009 09:01 pm (UTC)
So sorry about the obscenely late reply; I’m just relying on the better-late-than-never line. I’m so glad you enjoyed the story. Scarlet gave me a lot to work with. The more-detailed the prompt, the better. It was a blast to write.
Vaysh Swiftstorm: D/H_touchvaysh on December 13th, 2008 08:02 pm (UTC)
re: For Whatever Ails you
What an absolutely intriguing story, all of it – plot, the writing, the highly original scenario with the poems, the IC characterisation. I cannot tell you how much I love what you did with the prompt(s). The backflash structure worked perfectly, revealing the story more and more. That first-time anal sex - just wow, really, WOW! Amortenia or not, those layered images of dripping cherry juice and dripping come will stay in my mind even for a very long time. I adore the subtleness, too, of your psychology: it seemed to me that Draco was more than well aware that Harry had not fallen for him as much as he had for him, more aware certainly than Harry was about how much he had come to love Draco. Thank you so much for writing.
azoulas on December 13th, 2008 08:49 pm (UTC)
very beautiful!
Frayach ni Cuill: Checking It Outfrayach on June 21st, 2009 08:41 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much for commenting. I’m glad you liked it :)
acromantularacromantular on December 13th, 2008 10:04 pm (UTC)
Surprise!buttsex FTW!
*snickers*

That was surprisingly intense for what started out as a series of Christmas poems. The framing worked well, and I enjoyed the rawness of Harry and Draco's interactions. The poems were tons of fun, too.

Still not sure I understand what the DL planned to get out of dosing the boys with Amortentia, but it certainly worked for me. ;)
Frayach ni Cuill: Checking It Outfrayach on June 21st, 2009 09:09 pm (UTC)
Thank you, my dear. I’m so glad you liked it. Sorry for the hideously late reply; I’m relying on that ol’ better-late-than-never line.
zahavahzahavah on December 13th, 2008 10:08 pm (UTC)
very nice! felt just like a classic love potion!fic, with all the accompanying intensity of emotion, etc.
Frayach ni Cuill: Checking It Outfrayach on June 21st, 2009 08:51 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked it. I was going for the right combination of smut and puppy love, and the poetry was a blast to write.
rehsipusrehsipus on December 13th, 2008 10:42 pm (UTC)
This is just genius!! Every prompt combed out, spun into sheer silken treads, woven into a shimmering tale, a magnificent tapestry of emotion. Elegantly lined with tight-woven prickly humor.

"...Get over yourself, Weaselette. You may have him now, but I can assure you that your ickle boyfriend . . .” he spat out the word, “is not a virgin and hasn’t been for several months.”“...Clean up that little mess, Romeo. " Aww, hurt Draco lashing out. Helluva "freeze the room moment", I dear say even the twinkling fairy-lights on the tree hesitated for a few after that outburst :D

And Harry, lost the ring? *Snickers, thinks again and cackles evilly* Oh, Ginny, someday someone might let the truth slip on that one...
I don't think I've ever read anything resembling your accidental buttsex scene, and the fact that Harry never got further in than the head , SO HOT!

Also the way nobody could let Harry get a word in edgewise at crucial moments, but had to abruptly cut him of with their own assumptions...

“You really do love me. You have to if you’d have offered to do a whole year of dishes! Nothing else could explain such a thing.” BRILLIANT!

I have neither the skills nor the vocabulary to describe how much I loved this.

"Good-bye, my love. I wish you well
And may you forever burn in hell." --but of course Love, and fuck you too!

*Sniffles* Hugs!

Edited at 2008-12-13 10:52 pm (UTC)
Samantha-Hopethe_gubette on December 13th, 2008 10:52 pm (UTC)
This has got to be one of the most original ideas I've come across in fandom. I absolutely loved it. I loved the poems, the hot hot hot (surprise!) sex, the misunderstandings, all of it. Fantastic job.
Frayach ni Cuill: Checking It Outfrayach on June 21st, 2009 08:52 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much! I’m glad you liked it. I was going for the right combination of smut and puppy love, and the poetry was a blast to write.
tiger_iristiger_iris on December 14th, 2008 01:14 am (UTC)
This was absolutely marvelous.

I can't tell you how much I loved the first poem. It immediately settled the mood for this beautiful and enthralling story. The Christmas exchange was a great idea: such a brilliant bunch of poems, in what could be read, at first, as a comedy of errors gone particularly wrong, with Hermione (and Ron in a way) playing the role of deus ex machina. It was also an extraordinary piece of erotic writing, and I felt it added a kind of perverse pleasure to know that Harry remembered all those things in what should have been a holy night. It was nevertheless a true Christmas fairy-tale, where words seemed to be laced with the same passion that the one that fuelled the boys and love triumphed at the end. Thank you so much for this story.
beatnikspinster on December 14th, 2008 02:05 am (UTC)
The first time sex was well done. Very sexy and perfectly charming fumbles. I enjoyed this a lot. :)
Frayach ni Cuill: Checking It Outfrayach on June 21st, 2009 08:52 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much, love! I’m glad you liked it. I was going for the right combination of smut and puppy love, and the poetry was a blast to write.
ura_hdura_hd on December 14th, 2008 02:37 am (UTC)
Such a wonderful story with a very original plot! Thank you!
secretsolitaire: nghsecretsolitaire on December 14th, 2008 03:16 am (UTC)
I would leave a more coherent comment, but the sex scenes completely melted my brain. Jesus. The cherry image? a;sldfkjasld;fkja;ldkfj
Frayach ni Cuill: Checking It Outfrayach on June 21st, 2009 08:41 pm (UTC)
LOL! Thank you so much for commenting. I’m glad you liked it :)
E McGeemelusinahp on December 14th, 2008 06:07 am (UTC)
I absolutely loved the concept of this fic. I have a strange kink for Amortentia and don't get why more people don't use it in their stories in clever ways as you have done. The poems were such a great idea -- very Hermione -- and I loved how the different poems reflected the different characters.

There were some beautiful scenes, the ones by the river and in the pub were my favourites. And great use of the recipient's kinks.
Frayach ni Cuill: Checking It Outfrayach on June 21st, 2009 09:10 pm (UTC)
Thank you, my dear. I’m so glad you liked it. Sorry for the hideously late reply; I’m relying on that ol’ better-late-than-never line ;)